Water resources around the world are falling deficient. Analyse the possible reasons and provide your suggestion ?

Nowadays,there is no doubt that
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depletion has increasingly become evident ,
water
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and water
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resources
depleting throughout the world . In
this
essay , I will discuss many potential causes that play
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in minimizing them and I
also
prepare my proposal on
this
issue . Recently,
Water
saving
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is depleting over the world,
this
happen because the growth of populations is
enormous
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mounting and the
water
sources couldn't harmonise with
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growth .
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out on
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,
as a result
, it demonstrates that
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the world
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consumes 50% of
water
source
in
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these day
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that growing populations will consume 80% in
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next
40years
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40 years
.
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Furthermore
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result
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deforesation
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deforestation
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increasment
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increase
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useful for
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of
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and
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that
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lead to
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decreasment
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rain,
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represent one of
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most vital part
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water
resources
. In my opinion,
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the
goverment
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government
is responsible For recycling, it should
also
teach people about recycling benefits
from
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childhood and design voluntary programmes , because individuals should have the responsibility for using
resources
wisely and
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products that could be recycling them.
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, the
goverment
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government
should impose harsher fines and
puinshments
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punishments
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for those who
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off trees without any restriction.
in addition
, the
govemernt
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government
movement
system should ensure
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of
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has
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been affected. In conclusion,
although
the problems with population growth and barren land ,
this
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can be resolved by
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laws and
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the cooperation
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of people to enhance
in
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environmental sources.
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