Unversities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Some
people
claim that in each university major should be the same number of male and female
students
. I completely oppose
this
idea
because,
otherwise
lots of
people
that pass their entrance exams successfully will not get into the
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university
and the
students
that were accepted, probably will not be able to change their major
due to
this
reason. First and foremost, in order to avoid inequality among
people
, there are exams. They already help the university board to understand the academic level of all the
people
that took the exam.
Due to
this
reason,
this
change will be unnecessary and not fair.
Also
,
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is a huge probability that the society will not accept
this
idea
.
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Therefore
,
unncessary
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unnecessary
hype will appear.
Secondly
, nowadays lots of
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prefer to change their major. And it will not be possible for them, to do that because of
this
rule.
This
will cause
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enormous
problems not only for the
students
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but
also
to
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the university board. In
this
case,
students
will have to think out thoroughly
which
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major to choose. Because
otherwise
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they will have to dedicate 4 years of their lives to
this
field.
Thirdly
, the
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majority
of men doesn't prefer to work as a nurse, and the
mojority
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majority
of women doesn't prefer to for in
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construction
engineering or in the military. I mean that
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there are some circumstances that men or women would want.
To sum up
,
this
will cause major psychological problems
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the
students
,
due to
the
preassure
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pressure
that they will undergo during choosing their major. And
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society will not accept
this
idea
either, for the same reasons. Because of it I completely oppose the
idea
that for each major equal numbers of
students
should be accepted.
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