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Unversities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

#unversities #numbers #students
Some
people
 claim that in each university major should be the same number of male and female
students
. I completely oppose
this
idea
 because,
otherwise
 lots of
people
 that pass their entrance exams successfully will not get into the
univerity
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university
 and the
students
 that were accepted, probably will not be able to change their major
due to
this
 reason. First and foremost, in order to avoid inequality among
people
, there are exams. They already help the university board to understand the academic level of all the
people
 that took the exam.
Due to
this
 reason,
this
 change will be unnecessary and not fair.
Also
,
their
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 is a huge probability that the society will not accept
this
idea
.
Therefoe
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Therefore
,
unncessary
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unnecessary
 hype will appear.
Secondly
, nowadays lots of
student
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 prefer to change their major. And it will not be possible for them, to do that because of
this
 rule.
This
 will cause
enermous
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enormous
 problems not only for the
students
,
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 but
also
to
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 the university board. In
this
 case,
students
 will have to think out thoroughly
which
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 major to choose. Because
otherwise
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 they will have to dedicate 4 years of their lives to
this
 field.
Thirdly
, the
mojority
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majority
 of men doesn't prefer to work as a nurse, and the
mojority
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majority
 of women doesn't prefer to for in
constuction
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construction
 engineering or in the military. I mean that
,
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 there are some circumstances that men or women would want.
To sum up
,
this
 will cause major psychological problems
to
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 the
students
,
due to
 the
preassure
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pressure
 that they will undergo during choosing their major. And
the
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society will not accept
this
idea
 either, for the same reasons. Because of it I completely oppose the
idea
 that for each major equal numbers of
students
 should be accepted.
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