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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three dif erent areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. Write at least 150 words
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The line chart compares three regions (Australia, Canada and the European
community
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) in
term
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 of two variables, the
quantity
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 of
wheat
 exports in
millions
 of
tonnes
 and
five time
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 points, in de y-axis and x-axis respectively.
Overall
, the export of
wheat
 in Australia and the European community dropped and rose in turn.
Meanwhile
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 in
Canada
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 it remained unchanged with some fluctuation during the given period. It can be clearly seen from the graph that
wheat
 export in Australia fell from 15
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 in 1985 to approximately 11M of
tonnes
 in 1919 with a peak of around 16M in the year 1986. With regards to the European community, the
wheat
 that was sent abroad fluctuated slightly with a decrease from around 17
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
 in 1985 to less than 15M in 1986 and a gradual growth between 1986 and 1990 by 7
millions
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million
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tonnes
.
In
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 the other hand, selling
wheat
 internationally from Canada witnessed some sharp fluctuations.
Whereas
 the final amount of exported
wheat
 in comparison with the start one,
it
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remained the same. The export of
wheat
 reached its peak in 1988 with 15
millions
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million
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tons, and its lowest in the year 1989 with less than 15
millions
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million
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tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, millions, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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