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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The purpose of
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 report is
provide
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 data pertaining to the
hours
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 that are spent
to teach
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teaching
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 at three
school
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 levels.
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, the figure for upper secondary outnumbered
than
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those for primary and lower secondary.
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 with, in four countries, ranking first is upper secondary, and the most highlighted is
USA
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the USA
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, with nearly 1200
hours
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are
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spent. The second place
of
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in
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 teaching at upper secondary
school
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 belongs to Ireland, with just above 900
hours
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, which has
similar
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a similar
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 number as Spain. In terms of Japan, there was
a
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 lowest number of
hours
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, with 700
hours
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. With respect to other levels, teachers spent
times
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time
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to teach
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teaching
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 at
level
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the level
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 of lower secondary which increased gradually from Japan to
USA
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the USA
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, with the exception of
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school
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schools
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 in Iceland.
Relation
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 to primary
school
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, the number of
hours
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 was taught in
USA
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the USA
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 is the highest, which around 100
hours
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 higher than the figure for Spain.
This
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 was followed by Japan, spending
hours
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 for teaching was
the
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higher than that of Iceland, at 600
hours
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 and nearly 600
hours
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 respectively
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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