Art classes , such as painting and drawing are as important for children's development as other subjects so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree.

I disagree with the above statement that
art
classes
,
such
as painting and drawing are as essential for
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development as other
subjects
therefore
it
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should not be compulsory in high school.
Firstly
, children are already occupied with so many
subjects
, by
incoperating
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incorporating
painting and drawing and making it a must
will
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put
burden
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on them , they might not perform well
due to
too many
subjects
that they need to focus on.
Art
classes
should be treated as
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option rather
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making it compulsory.
Secondly
, not every child is interested in
art
,
for
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painting and drawing , when children don't have
interest
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then
they won't perform well , they will be just doing it for the sake of doing things.
Therefore
it's better suited for extra-circular
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activities
.
Thirdly
, it can be costly the materials used and needed for painting and drawing can cost parents
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money spent on these materials can be spent
elsewhere
, looking at the cost of living which is on the rise.
Lastly
, there will be
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on the teachers as they will have to deal with many
subjects
, which will lead to stress and added workload on them , they might want to switch to some other jobs or quit
due to
pressure ,
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students will suffer as there will be no teachers for them to teach. In conclusion , I disagree with the above statement because it loads
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burden
on students,
children
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and children
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may not be interested in taking
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art
classes
.
Art
classes
can be costly for parents to pay for.There will be
burden
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on teachers as they will be dealing with many
subjects
.
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  • Visual-spatial skills
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  • Emotional expression
  • Creative thinking
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  • Collaboration
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