Art classes, such as painting and drawing are as important for children's development as other subjects so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree.

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I disagree with the above statement that
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as painting and drawing are as essential for a kid's development as other
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, they should not be compulsory in high school.
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, children are already occupied with so many
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, by incorporating painting and drawing and making it a must
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put a
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on them, they might not perform well
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too many
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that they need to focus on.
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should be treated as an option rather than making it compulsory.
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, not every child is interested in
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, for, example painting and drawing, when children don't have an interest
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they won't perform well, they will be just doing it for the sake of doing things.
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, it's better suited for extra-circular activities.
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, it can be costly the materials used and needed for painting and drawing can cost parents quite a lot, and the money spent on these materials can be spent
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, looking at the cost of living which is on the rise.
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, there will be a
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on the teachers as they will have to deal with many
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, which will lead to stress and added workload on them, they might want to switch to some other jobs or
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result students will suffer as there will be no teachers for them to teach. In conclusion, I disagree with the above statement because it loads an extra
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on students, and children may not be interested in taking
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classes
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can be costly for parents to pay for. There will be a
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on teachers as they will be dealing with many
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