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Your friend has been a place on a course at the university where you studied.he/she would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend.in your email Describe where you lived when you where a student at the university Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accomodation Warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accomodation.

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Dear John, I am delighted to hear from you.
Firstly
, let me give
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chance to congratulate you on your achievement. Actually, the
University
 of Canada West is one of the best universities in the world. I would like to say
,
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 when I was a student in the same
university
. I used to stay very close to the institute. I was not more than 5 km away. The first year of my study I was able to find a good basement to stay. After that, the
university
 offered me campus hostels for the rest of 3 years. During my past experience, I would say some important tips about finding a place to live. First of
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 you should go to the
University
 website and
then
 look accommodation section. There are a number of accepted boarding places that can be found .
In addition
 to that, you should select a place below 5 km distance.
Further
, it will be better to find a room with a private bathroom and kitchen. Please don't choose places more than 10 km away because you have to spend considerable money on transportation.
Furthermore
, I strictly advise don't go for the shared rooms or bathrooms because it leads to disappointing you and bothering of your study.
Finally
, I wish on your future academic work. Love Kamal P
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