Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is ? What measure can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

Car
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The car
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helps mobility for some
people
, especially in urban areas. It will be easier too to work with a
car
than with public
transportation
because we can start driving from home to the office without jumping into another kind of
transportation
. Not only that, we can freely decide the destination from where we are. In my opinion, it is true that
car
ownership has increased over the past thirty years. Not only that, but the type of
car
is
also
varying. Now, electric
cars
are
also
used in several countries.
For instance
, electric
cars
can help to reduce the pollution. But, pollution is not the only problem in urban areas. Because everyone wants to mobilize in a
car
, it shaped a big traffic jam. Both standard and electric
cars
will be stuck in the street because of
this
. In order to solve the traffic jam issue, the government should take real action. The first thing to do is to develop public
transportation
facility. As we know, one of the reasons
people
use
cars
is because of the comfort. The government should make public
transportation
as comfortable as their own
cars
. If public
transportation
facilities has increased in numbers and
also
developed comforts,
people
wouldn't think twice to use them. The cost of public transformation
also
needs to be reduced. As it is a public facility, it should help the
people
in the city to mobilize easily in comfort without a heavy cost. By using public
facility
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, we
also
contribute
in
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reducing
the
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pollution and traffic jam.
This
also
will reduce the number of
car
owners.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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