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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is
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 in It sectors over the years. Its applications are widely used in our
day to
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day-to-day
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day
 activities.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and
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disadvantages
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 and look at what dominates the other . Internet has become part and parcel of our life from morning tea to sleep. applications like smart watches
helps
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 us to keep
a
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track of our heart rate and blood pressure and
this
 information is stored in
smart phones
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smartphones
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. Many voice assistants today can
also
 do some tasks with the help of voice control.
e commerce
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e-commerce
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 websites are delivering to our
door steps
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doorsteps
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. We can
also
 monitor infants at work using CC TV. We can learn anything and
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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 from
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 itself
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 , a story where
Apple
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an Apple
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i
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apply
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watch detected heart act
before hand
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beforehand
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 itself and when fainted they were able to
retreive
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retrieve
every
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day
 health information of
patient
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the patient
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 as
watch
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the watch
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trackes
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tracks
trackers
 every
day
. On
other
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 hand
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people become too lazy and will be too much dependent. The
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employment
employement
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employment opportunities
oppurtunites
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opportunities
 will gradually decrease as machines will complete all the work .
Childeren
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Children
are
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 attending online classes and opting to play indoor games .
As a
result
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,result
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 children will lack
excercise
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exercise
 and will have
fear
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a fear
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 to interact with any peers or other people.
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, these days mothers are using phones
while
 feeding babies ,in
this
 process there are exposed to sensitive light causing eye problems at
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 early age itself. In conclusion , I could say that
advantages
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the advantages
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outweigh
outweight
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 because
todays
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 world is not without
internet
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the internet
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,
while
 its in
hands
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the hands
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 of people to overcome hurdles associated with Information technology
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