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The pie compares important retails of New Zealand from 1966 to 1996.

#zealand
The two pie
chart
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charts
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given
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give
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 information on seven categories of New
Zealand
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Zealand's
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 necessary things (food, cars, petrol, restaurants, furniture, computers, books) between 1966 and 1996.Units are measured in percentage. It is noticeable that the proportion of selling furniture and cars experienced a significant fall over the 30 years
while
of
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apply
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food
rise
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risen
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. In 1966,44% of
an
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the
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 average New Zealand sales rate went on food which was the largest pie of the chart and by 1996, it was without any changes,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 45%. During a
half decade
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, the
using
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use
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for
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of
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 computers
of
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by
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 New Zealand consumers experienced a considerable fall from 23% to 8%.
By contrast
, in terms of furniture make the proportion of sailing
this
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in this
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 category made up 10% in making the largest
retails
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retail
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 belonged to
book
Wrong verb form
booking
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 in the first year,
however
, next year period there was 8 % in
this
 rate.
Computers
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The computers
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 category was without anything over the given period, at 1%.
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