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Many countries raise fuel prices in order to deal successfully with problems pertaining to traffic and pollution. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution?

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Recently, traffic congestion and poor air quality are crucial
factors
 which many countries want to mitigate by climbing fuel costs. In my perspective,
this
 trend could have approximately less than a
half cent
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half-cent
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 to be successful to address those problems,
while
 other
factors
such
 as
tax
as well as
 providing integrated public
transportation
 play a pivotal role in
this
 issue. It will be examined in the following essay Raising fuel costs is one of the popular programs taken by several nations to cope with traffic bottlenecks and air pollution.
Furthermore
, some
people
 believe it has only taken less than 20% in reducing it
due to
 the root causes is not fully addressed the issues.
Besides
,
people
 tend to use their private transport since
isit
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it
 more super easy compared to public
transportation
 quality. As an illustration, In Indonesia there were five times fuel cost became increased in the stated during the
last
 20 years. Yet, traffic bottlenecks and emissions are getting worse.
Thus
,
this
 trend has not affected handling the circumstances.
On the other hand
, increasing progressive owning
tax
,
carbon
tax
,
as well as
 building an integrated green mass
transportation
 system are likely crucial
factors
 which have to take into account.
Firstly
, taxes is a powerful instrument to make
people
 think twice to purchase private
transportation
, as a ,result it will have a positive impact to reduce the density of vehicle or motorcycle on the road.
Moreover
, they should be considered it must be low emission, if they are not, the state will charge them with the
carbon
tax
 as good environmental law enforcement in
carbon
 release. Ultimately, equipping a city with integrated mass
transportation
 will lead to
people
 shifting from conventional to public
transportation
 based.
Besides
, it should be supported by a wide range of schedule availability, super easy amenities, and affordable cost.
Consequently
, lesser vehicles on the road and less
carbon
 monoxide emitted. In conclusion,
although
 raising energy costs is one of the considerably optioned to cope with
this
 problem, I believe it must be supported
also
 by increasing taxes
as well as
 providing an integrated green mas
transportation
 system as a comprehensive approach to sustainability
transportation
, considering environmental issue
factors
.
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