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The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about populations in Australia and Malaysia in 1980 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The following table illustrates data regarding the demographic indicators in
Australia
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 and
Malaysia
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 in 1980 and 2002. It can be easily observed that throughout the period, considerable growth was witnessed in both nations'
population
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 sizes. The two countries recorded comparable stable figures for roughly equal men and women rates.
However
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,
Australia
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 was home to more senior citizens than
Malaysia
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. Regarding the first three categories, both nations saw a noticeable boom in
population
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 density. Specifically, the figure for
Malaysia
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 grew approximately twofold in 2002, at 24.3%
while
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Australia
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's census increased by 4.9 million within a 22-year time. The men and women
population
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 rates in
Australia
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 remained stable through time, which were 49.9% for males in 2002, and a slightly higher amount for women at 50.1%.
On the contrary
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, the Malaysian male percentage saw a marginal incline by 0.3% to 50.6% and a reciprocal decline for the female proportion to 49.4% during the same time. In terms of the remaining three indicators, both examined countries underwent a downward trend in their birth rates
at the end
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 of the period. With the fall of 1.0% seen in
Malaysia
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,
this
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 country still owned a significantly higher birth rate and annual
population
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 growth than
Australia
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, which were 3.2% and 2.4% (in 1980),
along with
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 2.2% and 2.4% (in 2002), respectively. As for the elderly adults' trend, the amount of the
population
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 aged over 65 in
Australia
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 remarkably rose by 2.8% to 12.4% in 2002
while
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 in
Malaysia
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, the changes were less dramatic with the seniors' rate climbing only by 0.6% to 4.3%
overall
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, malaysia, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population
  • growth
  • increase
  • larger
  • smaller
  • area
  • million
  • year
  • comparison
  • features
  • rate
  • significantly
  • higher
  • density
  • around
  • approximately
  • period
  • higher
  • lower
  • information
  • reporting
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