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Write about the following topic: Should long-term job seekers in receipt of government benefits be made to do voluntary work so that they give something back to the community? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the era of Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning, unemployment is a big concern in developing countries. I aligned with the thought that the government should take appropriate steps to solve the issue so that long-term
job
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 seekers receive the incentives from government, that will encourage those
people
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 to do any
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 of volunteer
work
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 and they can give something back to society as well. The first and most important aspect of doing so is they will encourage others to do
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kind
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 of
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 if they will be get benefited from any
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 which will consider volunteer
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 and inspire others as well.
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, If authorities will pay them some token of money as appreciation they will tend to do more
work
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. Like, the group of
people
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 named "Blue Beach" who are involved in cleaning the plastic waste at Juhu Beach in Mumbai India is the inspiration of many young
people
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. As they are the
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 who are doing
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kind
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 of activities has no
job
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 or earn very less money.
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, there are some NGOs that are helping needy
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such
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 that Orphan Children and running old age homes. If that
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 of group will be benefited from the authorities of their area by getting grants and yearly incentives,
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 they will be able to provide extra and best services to them.
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, that type of person will not feel alone and not live without the necessary services. To summarize, any
people
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 who have no
job
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 and find a
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 for a long time may turn to
volunteer
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 and can revert something back to society that will be helpful for them
as well as
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 the society.
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