An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers are leaving their poor countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to overcome this problem?

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It is true that in developing

countries

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, in order to work, many health care providers and educational mentors are urging

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the

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another

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countries

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. From my point of view, there are several reasons behind

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reasonable problems and their solutions.

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with, steady income is the biggest advantage to move

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country. Nowadays it is crystal clear that there is a huge difference

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salary between

poor

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and developed

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countries

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, to be exact,

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salary of

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doctor in Mongolia is approximately 250$ in a month,

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, in the USA it is started around 5000$.

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another big advantage in developed

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which is they have the latest technological

equipments

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computer tomography for diagnosis, robotic surgery tools, electronic boards and so on.

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, in underdeveloped

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, many students study together in

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public school which is more than fifty students in one class.

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, professionals

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teachers and tutors are experiencing

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syndrome in their workplace. To tackle

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issue, the government should do some changes with certain stages. First of all, they need to support their skilled workforce

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financially

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loss of professionals can be

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economic drawback to that country. In

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second place, the government can make a law about work

contract

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contracts

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, to be specific, these

professionalists

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have to work

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least 3 to 5 years in their own nation shortly after graduation.

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, they need a fund which supports scholarships for students who want to be

doctor

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doctors

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teacher

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. It will help

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workforce

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the workforce

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these profession

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. In conclusion, there is no doubt that many nations are facing with loss of skilled people

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developed

countries

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and

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, it will be hard to manage

medical

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and educational

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without good experts.

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reason, the government need to take

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immediately in order to keep them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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328 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Brain drain
Skilled labor
Developed nations
Essential services
Healthcare
Education
Economic impact
Social impact
Migration
Inequality
Disparity
Foreign aid
Investment
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