An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers are leaving their poor countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to overcome this problem?
It is true that in developing
countries
, in order to work, many health care providers and educational mentors are urging to
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the
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another
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another country
other countries
countries
with stable economy
. From my point of view, there are several reasons behind Fix the agreement mistake
economies
of
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this
and in this
essay, I will discuss about
reasonable problems and their solutions.
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To begin
with, steady income is the biggest advantage to move another
country. Nowadays it is crystal clear that there is a huge difference Change preposition
to another
of
salary between Change preposition
in
poor
and developed Add an article
the poor
country
, to be exact, Fix the agreement mistake
countries
average
salary of Add an article
the average
residential
doctor in Mongolia is approximately 250$ in a month, Add an article
a residential
on the other hand
, in the USA it is started around 5000$. Moreover
, there is also
another big advantage in developed countries
which is they have the latest technological equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
for
instance
computer tomography for diagnosis, robotic surgery tools, electronic boards and so on. Add the comma(s)
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In addition
, in underdeveloped countries
, many students study together in average
public school which is more than fifty students in one class. Correct article usage
an average
As a consequence
, professionals such
as,
teachers and tutors are experiencing Remove the comma
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burn-out
syndrome in their workplace.
To tackle Correct your spelling
burnout
this
issue, the government should do some changes with certain stages. First of all, they need to support their skilled workforce with
financially Change preposition
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otherwise
loss of professionals can be huge
economic drawback to that country. In Add an article
a huge
the
second place, the government can make a law about work Correct article usage
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contract
, to be specific, these Fix the agreement mistake
contracts
professionalists
have to work Replace the word
professionals
at
least 3 to 5 years in their own nation shortly after graduation. Change preposition
for at
Lastly
, they need a fund which supports scholarships for students who want to be doctor
or Fix the agreement mistake
doctors
teacher
. It will help Fix the agreement mistake
teachers
increasing
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increase
workforce
of Correct article usage
the workforce
these profession
.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that many nations are facing with loss of skilled people Change the determiner
this profession
these professions
to
developed Change preposition
in
countries
and as a result
, it will be hard to manage medical
and educational Correct article usage
the medical
field
without good experts. Fix the agreement mistake
fields
For
this
reason, the government need to take actions
immediately in order to keep them.Fix the agreement mistake
action
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