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Internet is an important part of our lives and we cannot imagine our job or studies without it. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the Internet?

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It is certainly true that in
this
 era the
internet
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 a significant role in our lives, and it is impossible to
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 our life without it. There are many merits including,
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 us
to
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information
,
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and help
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help
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 us to communicate and
demerits
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 of using
internet
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such
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,
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physical and mental issues. On the one hand, there are several drawbacks
of
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 using
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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.
Firstly
,
internet
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the internet
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encourage
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people
 to adopt
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle.
This
 is because
people
 nowadays, spend a considerable
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amount of time in front of
internet
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 rather than doing exercise, which
this
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can
leads
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 to
increase
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the
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 rate of obesity among
people
 .
Secondly
,
internet
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 can
makes
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 individuals feel isolated and
loneliness
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.
For instance
,
people
 these
day
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 prefer to interact through social media
such
 as
,
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 Facebook,
twitter
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 rather than face-to-face interaction, which
this
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can
leads
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 to increase mental health issues namely, depression,
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.
On the other hand
, there are
a
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various benefits of
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internet
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. The first advantage, the
internet
 gives
people
 access to a wide range of
information
 in different
field
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fields
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 regardless of their geographical
loaction
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location
 compared with the past when
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libraries
only
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the
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 resource
of
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information
.
For example
,
people
 can use Google to search
about
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 plenty of
information
 about,health, history,
news
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and news
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 from their comfort
home
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. The second advantage, the
internet
 helps us to keep in touch with loved ones regardless of their geographical
loaction
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location
, which
this
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can
boosts
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 relationships in
community
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the community
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. To illustrate,
people
 who study or work abroad can make
video
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a video
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 call with
his
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 family or friends, which
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can reduce the
feel
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 of
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being isolated
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isolated
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. In conclusion, the
internet
 have have upsides namely, gives
people
accessa
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access
 to
information
,
helps
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and helps
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people
 to stay in touch with their families,
friends
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and friends
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,
however
, the downsides of
internet
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the internet
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 including, motivate
people
 to adopt
inactive
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an inactive
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 lifestyle,
make
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making
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people
 struggle with mental health problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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