Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, in some groups of young generation usage of smartphones is part of their daily routine. I think the chief cause might be the development of social networks. I personally do not have a positive attitude toward the consumption of smartphones.

Firstly

, I personally believe there are several reasons for

this

event but

I

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seems to me the effect of social networks is the decisive factor

for

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in

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increasing usage of smartphones particularly in

this

era. There are several tools and facilities in

this

type of app

such

as Facebook which encourages children to engage by that. Communication or

share

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sharing

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their photo with their friends or family are very easier through these apps.

Additionally

, they are able to follow the

last

news and post of

favorite

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favourite

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individuals

such

as star actors or famous football players.

Secondly

, in my opinion, the negative aspects of

this

development are far more because there are several health problems happening to them.

Due to

the

last

research by the Australia Institute, the majority of students who spend their daily time

with

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on

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mobile are prone to have some health problems

such

as blood pressure or

overweight

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.

It is clear that

the amount of outdoor activity declines remarkably in

this

group of teenagers.

Moreover

, it is created many problems in their education.

The

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wide variety of tutors usually have complained about the academic failure of students who spend a noticeable of their time

by

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on

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this

device. In conclusion, I assume it is logical that the main reason for

this

happening is social networks.

Although

might have some advantages, I personally think the negative points of that are far more

due to

,

rise

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number of academic failures of pupils.