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Some companies and organizations require their employee to wear uniform. What are the advantage and disadvantage of wearing uniform?

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A host of
work places
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workplaces
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 give a particular
dress
code
 to their workers. From my
propect
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project
prospect
,
the
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a
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 large percentage of merits are appearing, in parallel, some demerits are turning up. At first
glace
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glance
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, a plethora of companies want to follow their employee
a
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particular pattern of
dress
code
.
Initially
, most crowds give pride to certain
uniforms
such
 as police and army
uniforms
. When policemen or
armymen
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army men
 wear their
uniforms
 and they feel
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a sence
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sence
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sense
 of
proud
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;
therefore
, they do their
duities
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duties
 with more responsibility.
Additionally
,
dress
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code
 is a symbol to
reconize
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recognise
 the professions.
For instance
, when
doctor
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doctors
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 and
nurse
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nurses
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on
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in
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 their duties in hospital
uniforms
 help to distinguish both
of
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apply
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them easily.
Consequently
,
a
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an
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atitude
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multitude
 of
organization
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organizations
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mandotary
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mandatory
mandatary
 their employees to wear
the
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name tags
along with
 the uniform. On the other side, it can not be denied
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that wearning
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wearning
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learning
unifrom
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uniform
 can bring some detrimental among employees. One among them is that,
sometime
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sometimes
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 people feel
bore
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bored
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 when wearing the same
dress
 all the time. Henceforth, some people don't want
the
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 particular job because of the
dress
code
. Despite
this
, in many
cases
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 folks don't give the proper respect to their uniform. In
concluion
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conclusion
,
although
 wearing the uniform has
a
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numerous pros, having a day off in wearing a
unifrom
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uniform
 can bring more positive outcomes.
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