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the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station

the diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station
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The given scheme explains the detailed process of how
electricity
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 is produced by
hydroelectronic
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hydroelectric
power
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station
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stations
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. In general, it takes
reversible
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a reversible
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 process for
day
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 and night.
Electricity
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 will be produced during the
day
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 and at night the
water
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 pumped back into
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a high
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high level
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high-level
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reservoir
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. The
water
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 source to generate
electricity
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 is coming from a river and will be directed to
high-level
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a high-level
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reservoir
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as
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apply
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we called
dam
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the dam
a dam
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. During the
day
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, the intake gate of the dam is opened in order to create a
flow
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 with
a
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apply
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high pressure because
its
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it's
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 coming from the high place down to
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turbine
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the turbine
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.
Therefore
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, the
turbine
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 would be spinning, making the generator changes the
kynetic
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kinetic
 energy from
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turbine
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the turbine
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 to create
electricity
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. After
that
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,that
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 the
power
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 coming from
hydro electric
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hydroelectric
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power
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 station will
be
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flow
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flow
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 through
power
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 lines and
stopped
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stop
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 at
national
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the national
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 grid. The
water
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 which is used to spin a
turbine
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 is
flow
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 into
low-level
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a low-level
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reservoir
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. During the night, the
water
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 will be pumped back into
high-level
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the high-level
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reservoir
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 which is the
flow
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 is reversible from the
flow
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 during the
day
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. After the
water
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 is pushed back into the dam, the intake gate will be closed and opened again during the
day
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 to create
power
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electricity
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, day, water, reservoir, flow, turbine with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Reservoir
  • Penstock
  • Turbine
  • Generator
  • Transformer
  • High voltage
  • Renewable energy
  • Kinetic energy
  • Potential energy
  • Power grid
  • Sustainable
  • Flow rate
  • Energy conversion
  • Hydraulic pressure
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