the chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant

the chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant
The circular graph and table offer insights into how many travellers from more than 3 countries there were, how long and where they stayed, and what they did at a particular holiday resort, based on the data collected in Australia. From an overview, the most striking feature is that European globetrotters held the predominant proportion, compared to the others. It is
also
evident that there was a remarkable disparity in their choices. Regarding the information pertaining to the pie chart,
the
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European was ranked at the top tier, with 37%, followed by the US and other countries. The former accounted for 35%,
while
the latter was responsible for 18%. Meanwhile, Asia registered a minuscule share of 10%. As far as the tabled figures are concerned, the staying duration of European and American
visitors
was about more than 14 days, which is followed by other-regional guests (10 days) and Asian
visitors
(7 days). Meanwhile, both Asia and the US chose hotels, albeit at different standards, travellers from Asia and other regions shared the same idea about accommodation which is camping and caravan.
In addition
, the primary activity of Asian and American
visitors
is sightseeing,
while
foreigners from Europe chose swimming and sunbathing and the rest
visitors
chose surfing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • comparison
  • spike
  • drop
  • correlation
  • seasonal variation
  • demographics
  • tourist influx
  • resort
  • holidaymakers
  • visitor statistics
  • notable changes
  • fluctuation
  • steady growth
  • decline
  • peak season
  • off-peak season
  • international tourists
  • domestic tourists
  • external factors
  • economic conditions
  • political climate
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