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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information about the top three countries that exports
pineapple
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 in the years 2009 and 2019, measured in millions of metric tonnes, and the pie chart illustrates the detailed spending for users in each
pineapple
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 in 2019, measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is noticeable that in 2009 the most exportation was from
Country
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B
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,
while
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 in 2019 from
Country
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 A.
Subsequently
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, the biggest spending for consumers was for distribution and retail sections.
According to
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 the bar graph,
Country
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 A and
Country
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B
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 exports the most
pineapple
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 in 2009 and 2019, respectively. In 2009,
Country
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 A stood at around 1.5
million
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,
while
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Country
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B
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 exported more than 4
million
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, making it the highest
pineapple
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 exporter in that year, with the least from
Country
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 C at less than 1
million
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 in 2009.
However
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,
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although
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in 2019
Country
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 A sold more than 10
million
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,
while
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Country
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B
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 and C only exhibited below 2
million
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 and approximately 1
million
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, respectively.
Furthermore
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, the highest spending for consumers came from distribution and retail purposes, which accounted for 35%, more than two times higher than tax spending at 16% in 2019.
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 it was followed by profit expense at nearly 20%. Other than that, other costs were less significant, with a maximum of 12%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, b, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • world pineapple exports
  • top three producing countries
  • 2009
  • 2019
  • breakdown
  • cost to the consumer
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
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