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Some people believe teenagers should follow the examples of older people, others believe it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give ypur opinion.

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 some argue that teenagers should take examples from older
people
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, others think
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 better for the young
generation
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 to have their own way of thinking.
People
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 who learn from others'
mistake
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, can make progress faster and safer but sometimes, new
ideas
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 create a better world which has a great contribution to
society
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.
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 essay will elaborate on both
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 and a personal conclusion. On the one hand, the elderly
generation
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 has a huge experience with the meaning of
life
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, and they can provide priceless
advice
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 about what does it really matter in
life
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.
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, many grandparents conclude over decades of
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, that
life
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 has basic principles which help humans to have a happier
life
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, or sometimes it supports them, to pass easier through difficult moments. Every time, ageing
people
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 learn new generations ,to be honest, friendly,
to
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 have faith because, these are essential
thinks
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things
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 which really matter throughout
the
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apply
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life
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. These
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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, definitely help modern
society
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, who do not have enough
life
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 experience, to scrape through awful events.
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, young adults who live
life
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 just through
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 provided by the previous
generation
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, risk creating a monotonous
society
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. Youth
society
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 should be encouraged to develop their own
ideas
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,
to
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 adopt new concepts of thinking because all brilliant
ideas
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 were developed by thinking
out
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 of
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. For ,example Bill Gates who developed Windows, definitely changed our way of living. Nowadays, almost everything can be done easier with a computer, from travelling
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 to construction, and
this
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 was happening because a young man with huge ambition was encouraged to think and develop his idea. In conclusion, the new
generation
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 should follow the
advice
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 of elderly
people
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 because during a lifetime are unpleasant moments which can be passed easier with
advice
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 from others' experiences, but at the same time new
ideas
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 must be encouraged because
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 means evolution which makes our
life
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 easier.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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