Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient, it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. How far do you agree with this statement?

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In
this
AI (artificial intelligence) era,
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is becoming essential for everyone
whereas
, from young to old, or either child or
student
, from
bussiness
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business
to
eductaion
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education
and so on.
Therefore
, there is no doubt to say that, humans are totally
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on
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internet
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.
However
, these days
students
are taking more
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of
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internet
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for their study and depending on
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internet
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so far which
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lots of negative impact on them, I am in
the
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favour
to put
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some
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on it. First of all,
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internet
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makes people easy
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and
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shortcut to solve any problem. It is the easiest way to get rid of any
hurdel
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hurdle
hurdles
within
a
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seconds. It is convenient
that is
one of the main
reason
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people are very
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of
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it.
Similarly
,
that
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easiest way makes
student
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students
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lean on it.
Students
use
internet
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for
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geting
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get
any
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answers without using their own
mind
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or without taking
it
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practically. To
examplify
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examine
, Chat GPT,
this
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is one of
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adavance
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advance
advanced
invention
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inventions
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on
internet
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that attract
students
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attension
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attention
.
Moreover
,
students
using
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it to get
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from
this
platform by just pressing some clicks.
However
, by doing nothing they are getting their score which makes them graduate without knowledge.
Furthermore
,
internet
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restrict
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the mind from
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or from other work as well. Youngster
use
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to do
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doom-scrolling
in
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internet
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which
waste
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their
time
by doing nothing.
Student
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spending
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more
time
on
internet
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and
giving
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less
time
for
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anything else.
However
, in the
time
of covid, when everything was
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settled
on
internet
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.
Student
takes more
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of
internet
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by searching from
internet
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and just
post
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it online to examiners.
That
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time
nobody was prepared for that and
students
had
less
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chances
to be
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cought
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caught
. Examiners had to take
theri
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their
final exams on
internet
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which
make
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students
more rely on
internet
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. To summarize,
Internet
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has
huge
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bad
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negative impact on
education
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system
for
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any place in
this
world. There should be
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restriction
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restrictions
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for
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on
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internet
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.
Internet
should be allowed for limited content. There should be not all
education
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material available on
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internet
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or there should be some
restriction
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or identification for
person
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to
used
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of
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it
therefore
not anybody can
use
it for their own
use
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • independent learning
  • critical thinking
  • excessive reliance
  • hinder
  • crucial
  • problem-solving
  • overly dependent
  • diversity
  • perspectives
  • global cultures
  • enriching
  • unrestricted
  • information overload
  • discerning
  • credible sources
  • incorporation
  • engagement
  • adaptivity
  • personalized learning
  • innovative
  • pedagogy
  • digital age
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