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Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.

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 can safely assume that in every learning, environment there is at least
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student
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 who is boisterous and has behavioural problems. Some people are of the opinion that they can have a negative impact on their colleagues. Putting them all together in a group is an effective way to create a conducive learning environment.
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, apropos of the statement, I am in consummate discord with it. The bases for my opinion are psychological and academic. From a psychological viewpoint, it is widely spread that
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 who do not receive sufficient attention at home are more prone to bad behavioural problems than those who do.
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, they will use all means possible, namely behaving badly to obtain the much-needed attention from their teachers.
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, grouping
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 with disruptive tendencies together is not the most appropriate solution as it will only make them feel more ostracised. From an academic point of view, putting disobedient
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 in
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 class will only limit their educational opportunities and
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 discourage the
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. It will be hard for the teachers to educate the
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 when they are all disobedient and
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 of the day, nothing will get done. It appears that combining the
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, regardless of whether or not they're rebellious, will serve as a more effective solution. On the
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 hand, teachers will have an easier time controlling the
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 and figuring out what measures to take with each
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.
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, having a well-behaving and intelligent
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 in the class will serve as a role model for disobedient
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.
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, disobedient
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 will somehow feel compelled to emulate the role model and change for the better.
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