The graph shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland, who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010

The graph shows the percentage of tourists to Scotland, who visited four different attractions in Edinburgh from 1980 to 2010
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The line graph illustrates the
proportion
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of visitors travelling to four places of interest in Edinburgh between 1980 and 2010. Generally, the percentage of travellers to the
castle
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was the highest throughout the
years
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.
While
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the zoo and
castle
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witnessed an upward tendency in their
proportion
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of visitors, the figures for those of the aquarium and festival decreased noticeably. In 1980, the zoo was the least attractive destination. It took up only 10% of visitors. within the next 20
years
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, the
proportion
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of that fluctuated continuously and
then
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increased to 20% in 2010.
Likewise
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,
castle
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visiting stood at about 20% in the first year of the observed period. After reaching its peak of 45% in 1995, the figure for people coming to
Castle
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dropped significantly to nearly 35% in 2010.
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, it's still remained the best tourist attraction in Scotland.
By contrast
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, the festivals made up the largest percentage of tourists in 1980, at 30%.
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, the figure for that kept decreasing within the following 30
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and ended up at 20% in 2010. The aquarium, which stood at 20% of travellers in 1980, reached a peak of 35% over the next five
years
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. The
proportion
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of that
then
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saw a dramatic decline two about only 10%, which made it the least popular destination in 2010.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, castle, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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