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The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts depict data regarding the percentage of
energy
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 generated from five different sources (Hydropower,
Oil
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, Nuclear power, Coal, Natural Gas) in a particular country between 1983 and 2003. In general,
it is clear that
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oil
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 was the most popular source of
energy
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 in both years despite a slight decrease.
In addition
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,
this
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 country
also
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 relied more on using nuclear power and natural gas by 2003.
To begin
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 with, in 1983,
oil
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 and coal were used to produce 42% and 23% of the total
energy
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, respectively. Over the next 20 years, the proportion of
energy
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 produced from
oil
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 saw a slight decline
by
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of
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 4%,
while
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energy
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 from coal
also
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 reduced by 10%.
In contrast
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, there was a reverse pattern in both figures for nuclear power and natural gas, which increased by 4% and 10% respectively to collectively surpass the percentage of
energy
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 generated from coal.
On the other hand
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, hydropower was responsible for only 4% of
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energy
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the energy
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 produced in both years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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