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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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 the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one
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area
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 money and the
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distribution
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.
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 the national government had the highest percentage and other sources (eg grants)had the lowest percentage,the
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 in salaries (officers and staff)rate peaked and the technology it was
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 percentage. In the
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 higher in salaries (officers and staff) at approximately 75% of spent money in 2017
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 in 2018 slightly lower at around 69%,In 2017and 2018 rate remind stable at just over 17% for buildings and transport, With
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8% in 2017 to
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14% in 2018 for the technology of sent money. In the
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 of police budget the National government reached a peak of about around at 175.5m in 2017 and after one
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 just below
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177.8m ,after that gradually increased
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local taxes from
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approximately 91.2 in 2017 to 102.3m of
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 budget ,
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 other sources (eg grant) still kept on same low figures just over at 38m ,in
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total
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 was 304.7m in at2017 and
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at 318.6
m in 2018 .
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words table, charts, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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