“Scientists believe that in order to protect the environment, people must use less energy in their daily lives. However, most people have not changed the way they live. Why do you think many people ? What could be done to encourage them to take action?
According to
scientists, people
have to use less energy on a daily basis in order to protect the environment, however
, the majority of people
have not changed the way they live. In my opinion, it is due to
the lack of knowledge and I believe that government can spread awareness about this
topic.
Firstly
, most individuals are very busy with their life
, they are so focused on their daily problems that they do not even think about what is happening to the environment. Fix the agreement mistake
lives
For example
, most people
are working
at least 6 to 8 hours a day which is why in their free Wrong verb form
work
time
they just rest and spend time
with their families. Moreover
, those people
do not have enough time
to go
search for the right information about environmental issues and think about what they can do about it.
Verb problem
apply
Secondly
, I think that one thing that can help the most in this
situation is if the government will put
more attention to Verb problem
pay
this
issue and educate society about this
. Furthermore
, if people
become more environmentally conscious, they are likely to put
more action. Verb problem
take
For instance
, most individuals will not find information themselves, and a lot of time
the sources are not reliable, which is why it is so crucial to rise
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raise
people
's awareness.
In conclusion, I am convinced that many people
will do a lot more to protect the environment if the government will educate society more about this
problem, so individuals will be aware of what is going on and what to do in order to help it.Submitted by maat2074 on
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