The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

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The map illustrates, the new possible plan for a supermarket (s) in the town of Garlsdon.

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, the town is surrounded by 3 main villages and placement of the first supermarket is in a rural area

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the second one is in the city

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, the population of Grasdon is 65,0000. The Hindon

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is the least populated one, it has just 10,0000,

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, it is closer to the town than any other

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(12km).

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, Hindon is the nearest

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to the S1.

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place is connected to the industry by main roads and it has a railway that goes through S2 and to Crandson.

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, Brandson is the second biggest

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, it is 15,000 people and it is slightly

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than HIndon (16 km). Same as the previous place it has main roads to the industry, but in comparison to the other two villages does not have a railway. Cransdon is the most distant one (25 km) with 29,000 people. Near these two villages is housing on the north.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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3 paragraphs

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Congestion
Economic benefits
Environmental impact
Foot traffic
Green space
Job creation
Local property values
Parking availability
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