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The table demonstrates the percentage of school children attending four different categories of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.

The table demonstrates the
percentage
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 of school
children
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 attending four different categories of secondary
schools
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 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
proportion
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 of
children
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 attending
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most
schools
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 was a decrease
while
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 that in
Community
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Schools
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 was growth over a 9-year
period
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. From 2000 to 2005, the figure for
students
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 in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 was the highest whilst in 2009, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 attending
Community
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Schools
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 reached a peak. In 2000, the
proportion
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 of school
children
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 in Grammar
Schools
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 stood at 24%, which was twice as much as that in Specialist
Schools
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. There was a gradual fall in both Specialist and Grammar
Schools
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 over a 9-year
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 .
At the end
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 of the
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, the figure for
students
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 in Specialist
Schools
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 was 10%, which was 1% lower than that in 2005
while
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 the
proportion
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 of
children
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 attending Grammar
Schools
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 hit the lowest point of 2%, which was twice as low as that in 2000. In 2000, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 reached a peak at 52%
while
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 the figure for school
children
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 in
Community
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Schools
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 hit a low of 12%. During the 9-year
period
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, the
proportion
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 of
children
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 attending Voluntary-controlled
Schools
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 was steady fall whilst the opposite was true for that
in
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Community
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Schools
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. In 2009, the
percentage
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 of
students
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 in Voluntary-controlledSchools was 20%, which was 38% higher than that in
Community
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Schools
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.

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