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The table demonstrates the percentage of school children attending four different categories of secondary schools between 2000 and 2009.

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The table demonstrates the
percentage
 of school
children
 attending four different categories of secondary
schools
 between 2000 and 2009.
Overall
, it is obvious that the
proportion
 of
children
 attending
in
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most
schools
 was a decrease
while
 that in
Community
Schools
 was growth over a 9-year
period
. From 2000 to 2005, the figure for
students
 in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 was the highest whilst in 2009, the
percentage
 of
students
 attending
Community
Schools
 reached a peak. In 2000, the
proportion
 of school
children
 in Grammar
Schools
 stood at 24%, which was twice as much as that in Specialist
Schools
. There was a gradual fall in both Specialist and Grammar
Schools
 over a 9-year
period
 .
At the end
 of the
period
, the figure for
students
 in Specialist
Schools
 was 10%, which was 1% lower than that in 2005
while
 the
proportion
 of
children
 attending Grammar
Schools
 hit the lowest point of 2%, which was twice as low as that in 2000. In 2000, the
percentage
 of
students
 in Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 reached a peak at 52%
while
 the figure for school
children
 in
Community
Schools
 hit a low of 12%. During the 9-year
period
, the
proportion
 of
children
 attending Voluntary-controlled
Schools
 was steady fall whilst the opposite was true for that
in
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Community
Schools
. In 2009, the
percentage
 of
students
 in Voluntary-controlledSchools was 20%, which was 38% higher than that in
Community
Schools
.
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