The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the data of one country between the
year
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years
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2011 and 2018, the
amount
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number
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of
shops
that closed and the
number
of new
shops
that opened.
It is clear that
the shop closures nose-dived in the
year
2015
while
the shop openings are in a gradual decline. In 2011, Over 8,000
shops
opened but a significant decline was observed in the following
year
. After
that
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there is
steady
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a steady
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increase till 2014. Meanwhile, the exact
number
of
shops
closed was slightly above 6000 in 2011, which rose to more than 7000 in the
year
2013. About 4000
shops
opened in 2015, which dipped through the years and
finally
3000
shops
opened in the
year
2018.
On the other hand
, the
number
of
shops
that shut down plummeted significantly to below 1000 in 2015, After that there has been a significant increase in the
amount
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number
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of
shops
closed as it went over 5000 in 2018. In conclusion, In the
beginning
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the
number
of
shops
opened did affect the
number
of
shops
that opened and coincided in the
year
2014,
However
,
it
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they
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became independent of each other in the years that followed.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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