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In the recent years children are forced to study even in their leisure time. Is this a good practice? Do you agree or disagree?

#years #children #study #leisure #time #practice
In recent years, young students choose to concentrate on studying even in their respite. In my opinion, I agree with
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However
, I
also
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student
 practices during
school
 times.
Firstly
, using
time
 off to
practice
 is a good way to review what
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the
student
 studied in class. Hard
work
 created hard people who will be more successful in future, free
time
 is the best
time
 to
practice
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. Many good students always
studies
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 in their respite, so they will get
a higher scores
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 and more success than other
studentsstudent
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students student
.
However
, there is a
time
 to study and in free
time
student
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 should be resting as their respite.
School
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 should give
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student
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students
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work
 on
school
time
 for
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student
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students
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 can
practice
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students
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work
 harder and
increed
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increase
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score
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. In their free
time
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 they should do homework and
work
 from
school
 to
practice
 more.
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,
hard
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works
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alway
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always
 a good thing
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 children.
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