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Some educationalists agrue that non-exam,atr-based subjects, such as music,drama,art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary-school curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I agree with
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 statement. As we know, we generally have 2 part of
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, right and left
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. The right
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 usually used for exact field,
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 as mathemathics and science. The left
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 usually used for non-exam atr-based subjects,
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 as music, drama,
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, and craft. Some people have dominance of their used of
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, but it will be goof if we can balance it. As a student, we usually packed up with several
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 to learn, but not a non-exam atr-based
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. As we know,
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studies
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 not included in the exam, so the
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 are usually focusing on their exact
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. They have 5 days in a week studying in school studying the exact
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. But, not all of the schools including
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 in their compulsory study. Including
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subject
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 in the school curriculum can improve
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 academic performance and give positive impact to the
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,
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 as: 1. Improving
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 grade: Some
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 may not expert at the exact
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, but the opposite. The
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 that have a great skills in
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studies
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 can improve their grades through
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subject
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 2. Stress relief: Doing
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, music, or drama can help releasing their stress, because
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 can be fun. There is no right or wrong in expressing our kind of
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. 3. Increasing coordination level: To improve coordination between
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, they can create an
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 project together,
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 as drama. They skills in coordination and leadership can be trained well in these
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. I believe making
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 as compulsory can help increasing
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 performance of the
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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