The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.
The first graph illustrates the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney from 1995 to 2004,
while
the second line graph gives information about how many percentages of trains running
on Wrong verb form
ran
time
in the same duration.
Overall
, while
the percentage of passengers rose during the
Correct determiner usage
that
time
, the proportion of trains running on time
decreased, and there was a sharp fall by the end of the age.
At the start of the period
the number of travellers accounted for 250 Add a comma
,period
million
. Then
, this
figure slowly increased from 250 to 265 million
over four years. After that, there was a sharp rose to 300 million
in 2001, which was a peak of passengers during the whole period. Next,
this
number decreased to 280 million
at the end
of the period.
With regards to the percentage of trains running on time
, in the beginning, it could be seen that there was around 93% of success cases. Nevertheless
, the rate dropped to just over 85% in 1997. Moreover
, this
figure fluctuated and reached a peak at 90% in 2003. Finally
, 2004 experienced a sharp drop to 73% in 2004.Submitted by exze.shoka on
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