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The graphs below show a comparison of the expenses in the UK and the US.

The graphs below show a comparison of the expenses in the UK and the US.
The two pie charts compare the percentage of six categories (rent, DVDs, books , going out, transport and food) in expenses in
UK
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 and US. It is noticeable that the percentages of expenses
rent
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for rent
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 a significant fall in
US
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the US
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while
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this
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 figure
food
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for food
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 and books saw a big rose in
US
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the US
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. In
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UK
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the UK
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, 30%
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of an
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an
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the
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 average charge went on rent
this
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 was the largest pie
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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chart,
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however
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,however
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 the US
the
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apply
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this
Linking Words
 figure
small
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was small
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 for
this
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 category had fallen by20%.
By contrast
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, in terms of food
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,
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the percentage of expenditure
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this
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in this
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 category made up 18% in
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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 and
this
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 figure for
US
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the US
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 saw
increase
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an increase
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at
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of
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 25% . In
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UK
Correct article usage
the UK
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, the
smallpercentage
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small percentage
 of expenses belonged to books in
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UK
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the UK
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,
however
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, in
US
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the US
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 there was a 3% rise in
this
Linking Words
 category

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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