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Nowadays, full-time university students tend to focus on their studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities too. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays, full-time university
students
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 tend to focus on their studying and not be involved in other
activities
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 become a more talkative debate.
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, I will talk about
students
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 who are more focused towards their
studies
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 and not doing any
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.
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 ,that they are facing more anxiety
students
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 are facing other problems
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, if they focus on their
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 they will become sicker and feel more stressed, restless, and irritated too even a few
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 have stopped taking proper naps
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 that nowadays
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 living a more stressful and depressing life.
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, dedication towards
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 is important but extra
activities
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 are
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 very important if
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 are balancing both together that student doesn't feel any kind of health issues
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 feel fresh and energetic
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 studying and show good results they only focus on their
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. That's why I agree with the argument that nowadays
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 are not involved in other extra
activities
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. conclusion, there should be a balance between both study and activity. it helps to keep
students
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 more active and stressless in their life.
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