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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The four pie charts illustrate how many
units
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 of electricity
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production
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produced
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 by fuel
source
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sources
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 in Australia and
France
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 during the
20 year
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 period from 1980 to 2000.
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 in 1980 in Australia the total
production
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 make up 100
units
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, of which exactly
a
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half (50
units
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) is coal.
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, the overwhelming majority of
those
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the
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production
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it
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apply
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was in 2000 in
Australia
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Australia's
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 total
production
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 constitute 170
units
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, of which draw up again coal. The lowest indicator in 1980 was 10
units
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oil
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of oil
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 and in 2000 were 2
units
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 each
natural
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of natural
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 gas,
oil
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and oil
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. The highest indicator in 1980 in
France
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were
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was
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 exactly a quarter (25
units
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)
coal
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of coal
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 and natural gas. The
least
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last
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 one 5
units
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hydro power
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hydropower
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. The highest indicator in 2000 in
France
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 was 126
units
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nuclear
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of nuclear
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 power
production
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, and the
least
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last
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 one
were
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was
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 2
units
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 each
natural
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of natural
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 gas,
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and hydro
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hydro power
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hydropower
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. In comparison
of
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to
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years
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the years
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 in 1980 in
France
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 total
production
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 was 90
units
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 and in 2000 was 180
units
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, production, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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