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The reason the most individual are in debt is due to the over use as well as irresponsible use of credit cards

#reason #debt #credit #cards
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People nowadays are in debt usually because of the outcomes greater than incomes
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 overuse of
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 in every aspect of life even if it is not necessary. I will discuss both and give my own opinion on
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 regarding. first of all, most people working these days include males and females in different fields but the salary depends on multiple factors
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, it may depend on the learning degree, experience
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 working hours value.
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, increases in the prices of goods lately with constant salary may lead the nation to a difficult financial state. If income is less than what they spend humans will be in debt without a doubt. in my opinion, the best way to manage
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 problem is by scheduling the expenditures and obtaining only the necessary things.
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, the random use of
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 can be the main problem. Most shops, restaurants and online shopping prefer transferring money by
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 card.
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, buying from Amazon, Ali Baba and other online websites use bank
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 of cash money and people forget them self especially when it comes to online shopping, they may add to their basket unnecessary objects.
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, the shipping cost is very high in comparison with retail shops so it may be an additional amount of money on the humans.
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, I have read an article that online shopping has increased recently in the
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 five years compared with the past decades.
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 , putting a plan for the salary and how it should be spent at the begging of the month is important to reducing debt.
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, controlling the use of
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 especially when it comes to network shopping has a major role.
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