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The number of international conferences in three cities

#conferences #three #cities
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The graph illustrates the international
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 held in
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 A, B, and
C
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 between 1965 and 2010.
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, all
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three
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 experienced fluctuations throughout the period.
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city
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 A had the most
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 at the beginning of the period, the opposite was true
at the end
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 of the period. In 1995, all the
cities
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 had almost the same number of
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.
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it is noticeable that
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 A hosted 35
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 in 1965.
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 was followed by
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 B with about 31 meetings.
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,
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C
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 hosted non of the
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 for that year. Interestingly, there was a sharp drop for
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 A for the next decade with about 20
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 in 1975. In 1985, both
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 A and B had about 30
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 on average,
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 was followed up
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 a down and up trend until 2010 with 20 and 25
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 respectively.
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,
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C
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 experienced a dramatic increase from zero in 1965 to over 25
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 in 1995. During
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 year, all the
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 had
similar
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a similar
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 number of international
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.
Next,
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C
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 number of
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 decreased before reaching its highest point in 2010 with about 30
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.
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