The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is said that the main purpose of
science
is to be to enhance individuals
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individuals'
individual's
lives
. I totally agree with this
statements
that the major goal Fix the agreement mistake
statement
from
Change preposition
of
science
to
improve Add a missing verb
is to
people
Change noun form
people's
lives
.
To begin
with, science
plays a significant role in all aspect
of our Fix the agreement mistake
aspects
lives
namely, health
, transport
, communication
. At Correct word choice
and communication
level
of Add an article
the level
health
, advancements of
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in
medical
field Add an article
the medical
is
contributing to Change the verb form
are
increased
our Wrong verb form
increasing
health
,
and Remove the comma
apply
increase
the life expectancy of Wrong verb form
increasing
people
. This
is because, the
medical Correct article usage
apply
science
help researchers to
discover a wide range of medications for many serious diseases Fix the infinitive
apply
such
as,
cancer, heart attack, Remove the comma
apply
Covid-19
. Correct word choice
and Covid-19
For example
, thanks to medical science
, people
who develop cancer can lives
longer compared to the past. In terms of Change the verb form
live
transport
, people
in recent times have access to different froms
of Correct your spelling
forms
transport
, cars, trains, air plane
,which these vehicles help Correct your spelling
aeroplane
people
to reach their destinations faster than past when was
Change the verb form
were
people
only rely
on Wrong verb form
relied
cameles
or horses.
Regarding communication, advancements Correct your spelling
camels
of
Change preposition
in
technology
science
Correct word choice
and science
allows
us to search Change the verb form
allow
about
any information from our homes without needing to visit libraries. Change preposition
for
For instance
, using Google
engine is Correct article usage
the Google
eoungh
to searchCorrect your spelling
enough
tough
about
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for
a various information
likeRemove the article
various information
a piece of various information
,
Remove the comma
apply
health
, educational
, Replace the word
education
entertainment
, which Correct word choice
and entertainment
this
can help Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
to increase their knowledge with a
less effort compared to the past. Correct article usage
apply
Futhermore
, Correct your spelling
Furthermore
technology
science
Correct word choice
and science
assist
Correct subject-verb agreement
assists
people
to stay in touch with loved ones regardless of geographical location. To illustrate, people
who live away from their families can communicate with their families through smartphones or computers, which this
Correct pronoun usage
apply
make
our Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
live
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lives
more easy
than ever .
In conclusion, I totally believe that Replace the words
easier
technology
plays a key role to make our live
more convenient than before through advancements, Replace the word
lives
medicine
, Change preposition
in medicine
transport
, and technology
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite