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The most important aim of science ought to be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#aim #science #people’s #lives
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It is said that the main purpose of
science
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 is to be to enhance
individuals
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lives
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. I totally agree with
this
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statements
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 that the major goal
from
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science
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to
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is to
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 improve
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people
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lives
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.
To begin
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 with,
science
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 plays a significant role in all
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 of our
lives
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 namely,
health
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,
transport
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,
communication
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and communication
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. At
level
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the level
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 of
health
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, advancements
of
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in
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medical
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the medical
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 field
is
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 contributing to
increased
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increasing
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 our
health
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,
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and
increase
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increasing
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 the life expectancy of
people
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.
This
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 is because,
the
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medical
science
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 help researchers
to
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discover a wide range of medications for many serious diseases
such
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,
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 cancer, heart attack,
Covid-19
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and Covid-19
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.
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, thanks to medical
science
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 ,
people
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 who develop cancer can
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lives
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 longer compared to the past. In terms of
transport
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,
people
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 in recent times have access to different
froms
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forms
 of
transport
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, cars, trains,
air plane
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aeroplane
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,which these vehicles help
people
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 to reach their destinations faster than past when
was
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people
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 only
rely
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relied
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 on
cameles
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camels
 or horses. Regarding communication, advancements
of
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in
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technology
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science
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and science
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allows
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 us to search
about
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for
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 any information from our homes without needing to visit libraries.
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, using
Google
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the Google
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 engine is
eoungh
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enough
tough
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about
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a various information
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various information
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 like
,
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health
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,
educational
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education
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,
entertainment
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and entertainment
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, which
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this
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can help
people
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 to increase their knowledge with
a
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less effort compared to the past.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
technology
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science
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and science
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assist
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assists
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people
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 to stay in touch with loved ones regardless of geographical location. To illustrate,
people
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 who live away from their families can communicate with their families through smartphones or computers, which
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this
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make
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makes
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 our
live
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lives
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more easy
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easier
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 than ever . In conclusion, I totally believe that
technology
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 plays a key role to make our
live
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lives
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 more convenient than before through advancements,
medicine
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in medicine
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transport
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, and
technology
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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