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The age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020

#age #population #iceland
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The bar chart presents the population of Iceland between 1990 to 2020 differentiated by
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groups
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. Each
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 is shown by a different bar
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. The difference is counted in
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, we see a steady increase in the largest
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population
 of the
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 25-34 years.
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 the contrary, the children and
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adolescence
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 are fewer for each year measured. Interestingly, the only
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 that has a more or less stable population rate, is the
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 65+. Even though the
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 of young adults was the largest with about 30% in
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 1990,
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overwelming increat
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overwhelming increase
 to about 50% in 2020 leaving a huge gap
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 the other
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. As for the oldest
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, it was a slight fluctuation between 12 and 15%, during the same 30-year period, ending with 14% in 2020. The other
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 had
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a negative trend, including the children
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, the
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adolescence
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 and the
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 between 55-64 years. Despite the decline, the
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 was always the youngest
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 measured years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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