The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows Internet Usage in Taiwan by Age Group, 1998-2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart presents data
of
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internet
users
differentiated by
age
groups
between 1998 to 2000. The bars are
color
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spesific
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specific
for each
age
group,
while
the numbers given are in
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.
Overall
, we see that most
users
of
internet
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are in the
age
group 16-30 years, followed by the group 31-50 years
all
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three periods.
Nevertheless
,
internet
use is increasing in the other two
age
groups
, namely children under 15 and adults over 50 years. As expected,
the
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most
users
of
internet
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are
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adult
age
groups
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.
While
more than half of the
internet
users
were young adults in 1998,
this
changes to 44% in 2000.
Likewise
, the older adults had a
deacrease
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decrease
decreased
with 4%, turning under 40% in
year
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2000.
In contrast
, the youngest and oldest
age
groups
participate more in the world wide web
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each year. The percentage increase is 7% and 6% respectively, leaving the
groups
presenting 9% and 10% of the whole population of
internet
users
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, users, age, groups with synonyms.
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