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People have different expectations for their jobs. Some people prefer to do the same job for the same company, while others prefer to change jobs frequently. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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People
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 usually have different attitudes towards their occupations. In the modern world, choosing the right
work
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 is vital to employees' career paths. In
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 regard, lots of
people
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 choose to have a repetitive
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 under a certain employer
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 there is still a number of employees who are keen on jumping between different jobs and companies. There are solid reasons for
people
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 who choose to stick to a certain
work
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 at the same place. First of all, stable jobs are usually equal to a stable income.
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 means that their wage curve is predictable and will rise gradually as time goes by, and the trend is straightforward, enabling those employees to make long-term life scheduling,
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 as annual saving plans.
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, they may probably end up with a large sum of the deposit and have better endurance against economic crisis as
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 crisis leads to bankruptcy
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 losses and shortage of income.
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, choosing to stay in a certain company and do the same
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 repetitively contributes to their personal value in the company. In most occasions, as
one
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 person accumulates enough time their working experience grows,
eventually
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 they will become experts that hold unique skills and methods. So that their performance will not be gone unnoticed, and they are less likely to be fired
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 experience a higher chance of being promoted. For the
people
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 who jump from
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 to
job
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 frequently, obviously, there are benefits gained from doing that. On the
one
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 hand, they accumulated varied experience and enriches their curriculum vitae, so it is easy to find a
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 as their experiences are varied.
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, as they switch from
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 to
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 in a large frequency, it is effortless for them to compare the cons and disadvantages of
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 companies in person, resulting in a more reliable and specialised choice in choosing companies to
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.
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 To recapitulate, in my perspective, despite different
people
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have
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 different views on occupations, I still believe sticking to
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job
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 is a better choice, but I would switch between different jobs in advance before sticking to a certain
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 ad there is still lots of time for me.
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