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You have recently finished a course and would like to give some feedback to the course organiser. Write a letter to the college where you took the course. In your letter explain what the course was say what you enjoyed about the course suggest how the course could be improved.

#course #feedback #organiser #college
Dear sir, My self Ziva Patel. I am writing
this
 letter to draw your attention towards
some thing
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as well as
 appreciate you.I recently
chase
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 a diploma
course
 from your University and here I would like to share my experience during the
course
.Your staff is extremely supportive and they help us in
many
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way
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 during our
journy
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journey
. I had
choosen
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chosen
up
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a
course
of
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 " Advance learning of
languages
".I selected
a
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French and English
languages
. It was an excellent experience to
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language
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 in your huge and very
technicios
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technical
 classroom in past 1 year. The professors of your University taught us from the basic level
nd
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 it was very
usefull
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useful
 for us.
Moreover
, they gave us some homework so we can practice
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 home
also
in addition
 the weekend test gave us so much
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 towards our
languages
at the end
 I admire your staff who walk away with us during our pros and cons.
On the other hand
, I have
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 suggestions regarding
to
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your
course
. You have to improve in some way
likewise
 in the middle
of
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course
 the
languages
 because
littlebit
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little bit
 though for us so you have to start some extra classes so whoever
do
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 not able to
catch-up
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 with the
languages
 they
also
 learnt very fast and you have to fix extra test so we can judge our level on regular basis.
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 your
course
 was very helpful to us
fro
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 work in
the
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other countries.
Furthermore
, it will be fruitful for us. Hope you like my feedback and
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 is helpful for you to do some changes. Yours faithfully. Ziva Patel.
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