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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development on the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development on the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps show an industrial area of
town
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the town
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Norbiton
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of Norbiton
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. One of the maps shows the current map of the establishment and the other shows the planned structure of the future development.
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, we are shown that a significant change will be made in the coming years. In the current site of the industrial area, we can see that there are several factories in the
center
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 of the area. In the north, is a stream of river acting as a barrier
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 the industry and the farmland.
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 the west side of the region is a town which will remain the same in the future. In the planned future development all the factories are gone. Several housing estates are present and the river is not one smooth stream anymore as housing estates occupy some areas of the farmland.
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that
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 a school is placed on the east region of the land. Playgrounds, medical
centers
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 and shops are
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 present to modernize the town of Norbiton.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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