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Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.

Thw chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summeruse the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevent.
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The bar chart gives information about fast food consumption in the USA in 3 categories over the years.
Overall
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, once a
week
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 in 2006 and once or twice a month in 2013 stood at the same level and ranked first.
Moreover
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, every
day
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 stood
last
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 in 2006 and 2013. looking forward to 2013, every
day
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 stood at just under 5% and several
times
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 a
week
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 was approximately three
times
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 as large as every
day
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.
Furthermore
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, once a
week
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 formed approximately one-third.
Moreover
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, once or twice a month Contributed around 30%. The share of a few
times
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 a year and never was just under 15% and 5% respectively. Going forward to 2006 and 2013, every
day
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 remained at the same level and it was just under 5%.
However
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; several
times
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 a
week
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 witnessed a significant rise of 15% and approximately 10%. in 2006 and 2013. The farmer was just over 30% and the latter was just under 30%. once or twice a month in 2006 dropped moderately and in 2013 remained stable as once a
week
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. A few
times
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 a year remained stable at 15% and
also
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 never experienced a fall and placed just under 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, day, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food restaurant
  • Frequency
  • Consumption
  • Decadal change
  • Trend analysis
  • Peak years
  • Demographics
  • Eating out
  • Health trends
  • Economic conditions
  • Food industry
  • Demographic segmentation
  • Cuisine
  • Independent outlets
  • Chain restaurants
  • Longitudinal study
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