The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The visual representation provides information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The given data is in
million
pounds
, and it reveals both
the source of the income and the expenses.
Firstly
, there are 3 main categories of the budget source. The amount of money coming from the National Goverment
had inclined Correct your spelling
government
slighty
, from 175.5 to 177.8 Correct your spelling
slightly
million
pounds
. Furthermore
, the second group, which is the Local Taxes, had an even bigger improvement. The money allocated to the Police Budget increased from 91.2 to 102.3 million
pounds
. Lastly
, Other Sources happened to be steady in both
years
, only an
Correct article usage
apply
approximate
half a Change the word
approximately
million
pounds
were added to the last
years
value.
Change to a genitive case
year's
years'
As a result
, the 3 categories added up to a total of 318.6 million
pounds
from
2017 304.7 Change preposition
in
mill
, making Change to a plural noun
mills
this
a huge rise in terms of money.
The expenses are divided into 3 groups. Salaries, which is the biggest fraction in both
years
, fell down by 6%, which made it to be 69% in 2018. On the other hand
, Technology spendings
increased by 6%, with a value of Fix the agreement mistake
spending
total
Correct article usage
a total
14
% of the expenses. Change preposition
of 14
Lastly
, Buildings and transport remained steady, with a value of 17% of spendings
in Fix the agreement mistake
spending
both
years
.Submitted by balazspinter1107 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds, both, years with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼