The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The visual representation provides information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in an area of Britain. The given data is in
million
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pounds
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, and it reveals
both
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the source of the income and the expenses.
Firstly
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, there are 3 main categories of the budget source. The amount of money coming from the National
Goverment
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government
had inclined
slighty
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slightly
, from 175.5 to 177.8
million
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pounds
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.
Furthermore
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, the second group, which is the Local Taxes, had an even bigger improvement. The money allocated to the Police Budget increased from 91.2 to 102.3
million
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pounds
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.
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, Other Sources happened to be steady in
both
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years
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, only
an
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apply
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approximate
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approximately
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half a
million
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pounds
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were added to the
last
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years
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year's
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value.
As a result
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, the 3 categories added up to a total of 318.6
million
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pounds
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from
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in
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2017 304.7
mill
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mills
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, making
this
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a huge rise in terms of money. The expenses are divided into 3 groups. Salaries, which is the biggest fraction in
both
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years
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, fell down by 6%, which made it to be 69% in 2018.
On the other hand
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, Technology
spendings
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spending
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increased by 6%, with a value of
total
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a total
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14
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of 14
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% of the expenses.
Lastly
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, Buildings and transport remained steady, with a value of 17% of
spendings
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spending
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in
both
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years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "lastly".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, pounds, both, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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