The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles
The diagram illustrates the
process
of how recycling plastic
bottles product are
made up. Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, it takes nine steps to finally
make the products from recycled plastic
bottle
, completed with 4 main Fix the agreement mistake
bottles
process
which are sorting, washing, and heating, and Change to a plural noun
processes
finally
reconstructed
material for Wrong verb form
reconstructing
further
usage.
Firstly
, people need a self aware
of Add a hyphen
self-aware
its
own trash, they need to separate the material of waste Correct pronoun usage
their
especially
Add the comma(s)
,especially
the
Correct article usage
apply
plastic
bottle into recycle bin, afterwards
the junk Add a comma
,afterwards
are
loaded Change the verb form
is
in
garbage trucks. After it Change preposition
into
being
transported to recycle centre, the next Wrong verb form
is
process
is sorting out the dump by hand. Compressed tightly into several blocks shape before crushing it
into little pieces and washed.
The next following steps are used to transform these little pieces Correct pronoun usage
apply
junk
become Change preposition
of junk
a
Correct article usage
apply
reusble
material starting Correct your spelling
reusable
it
with pouring the pieces of Correct pronoun usage
apply
plastic
bottles into a machine that can produce plastic
pellets. These pellets will be heated to finally
forming
into raw Wrong verb form
form
material
that can be useable things in daily Fix the agreement mistake
materials
lifes
Correct your spelling
lives
life
such
as reusable bag
, pencils, clothes, and water bottles. These items are Fix the agreement mistake
bags
also
recyclable, therefore
the process
will begin again.Submitted by baitynuris191 on
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