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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles
#process #plastic #bottles
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The diagram illustrates the
process
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 of how recycling
plastic
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 bottles product
are
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made up.
Overall
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, it takes nine steps to
finally
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 make the products from recycled
plastic
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bottle
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bottles
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, completed with 4 main
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process
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processes
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 which are sorting, washing, and heating, and
finally
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reconstructed
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reconstructing
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 material for
further
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 usage.
Firstly
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, people need a
self aware
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self-aware
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 of
its
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their
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 own trash, they need to separate the material of waste
especially
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the
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apply
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plastic
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 bottle into recycle bin,
afterwards
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 the junk
are
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is
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 loaded
in
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into
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 garbage trucks. After it
being
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is
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 transported to recycle centre, the next
process
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 is sorting out the dump by hand. Compressed tightly into several blocks shape before crushing
it
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apply
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into little pieces and washed. The next following steps are used to transform these little pieces
junk
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of junk
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 become
a
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apply
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reusble
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reusable
 material starting
it
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apply
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with pouring the pieces of
plastic
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 bottles into a machine that can produce
plastic
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 pellets. These pellets will be heated to
finally
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forming
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form
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 into raw
material
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materials
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 that can be useable things in daily
lifes
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lives
life
such
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 as reusable
bag
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bags
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, pencils, clothes, and water bottles. These items are
also
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 recyclable,
therefore
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 the
process
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 will begin again.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, plastic with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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