The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles
The diagram illustrates the
process
of how recycling
plastic
bottles product
are
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made up.
Overall
, it takes nine steps to
finally
make the products from recycled
plastic
bottle
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, completed with 4 main
process
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which are sorting, washing, and heating, and
finally
reconstructed
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material for
further
usage.
Firstly
, people need a
self aware
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of
its
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their
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own trash, they need to separate the material of waste
especially
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the
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plastic
bottle into recycle bin,
afterwards
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the junk
are
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loaded
in
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garbage trucks. After it
being
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transported to recycle centre, the next
process
is sorting out the dump by hand. Compressed tightly into several blocks shape before crushing
it
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into little pieces and washed. The next following steps are used to transform these little pieces
junk
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become
a
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reusble
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reusable
material starting
it
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with pouring the pieces of
plastic
bottles into a machine that can produce
plastic
pellets. These pellets will be heated to
finally
forming
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into raw
material
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materials
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that can be useable things in daily
lifes
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lives
life
such
as reusable
bag
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bags
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, pencils, clothes, and water bottles. These items are
also
recyclable,
therefore
the
process
will begin again.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, plastic with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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