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At the present time, The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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 a lot of
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 compared with the number of older people population. There are several merits and demerits
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 phenomenon. In the following essay, I will present a couple of merits and demerits and drawbacks of the issue and
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 the benefits exceed its demerits. The first merit is that increasing young generations enlarges social
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. Utilizing and learning skills can adjust quickly faster than older generations.
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 contributes to technology new of company, and it helps the development of
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economy
. The second merit is that young
adults
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 future growth. Through education, they acquire knowledge and skills so
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 lead to have
economy
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 work.
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. The first demerit is that if young
adults
 who find new jobs are increasing, it can be burdensome in
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 market.
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, young
adults
also
 rise the rate of
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competitive
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 can increase
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a
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job
. Unfortunately, the parts of
adults
 who can not find a
job
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. The second demerit is that if rising the proportion of young
adults
, they can be burdensome when they
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. If they become older people,it increases sharply the cost of social
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. For these reasons, it is a factor which budget burden and
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 growth deter.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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