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The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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In today's contemporary era,
people
 are of contrasting views .Some individuals believe that the greying society
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 full of conventional notions about things in our everyday lives but
other
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 part of society is of the mindset that the ideas of golden agers are not aiding anyone.I side with the prior notion as I believe that the advice of senior citizens
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 important.Let us discuss
this
 argument followed by my point of view in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,Older
people
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 an imperative role in the flourishment of
youngsters
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career
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.
For instance
,If a person is trying to become a successful entrepreneur he will need
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an advice
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 to ameliorate himself with some traditional
values
, and those conventional
values
 will be obtained from the seniors.
In other words
,
People
 with age gain
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 amount of knowledge and
therefore
 they can guide us better in every way possible and there is a saying "old is gold" , it is true because the ideas given by
elderly
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 person is always aiding
one
 with
upsurging
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 amount of knowledge.
Furthermore
, Denizens get
better
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 understanding of life and morals given by senior citizens are very crucial for
one
's personality.To exemplify
further
, there was an article published by 'The Tribune'which stated that
people
 living with their parents are with top-notch
values
 and are full of standards and
therefore
 they are more successful. To fortify
further
,
One
 should always obey the advice given by elders as their
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 are always aiding a person in some or the other way. To recapitulate, high
values
 and morals are very important for an individual and I agree that older
people
 are full of experiences and
therefore
 they will guide us in the best way possible and
this
 will obviously aid
one
 in shaping their career.
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